Review Detail of ThirtyTyrants in Appetite! [BL]

Ein is the kind of character it's impossible not to feel sympathetic towards. He has had a very rough life, and his past trauma still affects his life even years later. I want things to go well for him, and hope that he finds the mental help he needs, however despite the hopeful dialogue and cheerful conversations with his friends, there's this feeling of inner turmoil to Ein, and a sense of foreboding to the narrative that gives off the feeling that things might not improve quite that easily. I like the supporting characters, and their cheerful nature provides a nice balance for Ein's bleak inner monologue. The novel is still in its early stages and I'm curious to know more about Matthew, what happened to him after the assault on Ein, and about the mysterious Henry who is very much a question mark at this point, regarding his intentions towards Ein. I also really like the food themes running through the novel, I personally love it when the food descriptions are brought up. I would recommend relying less on onomatopoeia, it's distracting and it breaks the flow of the narrative. It's better to describe the sounds, or to incorporate the sound in a descriptive sentence, for instance, "the elevator arrived on the third floor with a loud clank." There are some minor tense irregularities, but I think some revision would iron out those small mistakes. Overall, I think this a story with a very interesting premise, and the potential to be great if the extent of Ein's trauma is properly explored and addressed on the coming chapters. Whether his path will lead to recovery or further trauma remains to be seen, as it's too early to tell, but the journey has the potential of making for a very engaging and interesting story. Keep up the good work!