Hello! I noticed some *pow* *beep beep* like this actions, I recommend it if you change it into descriptions. Don't just tell us what is happening, like that sounds or whatever it is, show us what is happening. I also like your synopsis, it's really catchy, and the 1st chapter revealed to be interesting! đ
Phodoodles
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