Review Detail of amaturewriter in Reborn in One Piece with Naruto System
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-trains for yrs but isnt strong, joins luffy, Almost every chp so far is kinda boring and MC seems like a third wheel. like the past 2 - 3 chps is more or less cannon with MC mentioned doing something. The character interactions are plot forced. MC is bland, wants to be strong but for what? and last chp...C7, this dude was pathetic, he got scared of mihawk, I expected better of a person that trained for yrs in dangerous jungles with a NARUTO SYSTEM, and is also a person who is reincarnated. dude should've had a stronger will than anyone. Also author man, u shouldnt have given MC a system. MC has a naruto system and is an SI....this dude would easily be the strongest in the world within months to 1 or 2 yrs [luffy became a proper power house with 3 yrs training]....his SI knowledge would more or less give him more intelligence than anyone other than vegapunk, franky, etc and his wisdom would be unmatched in one piece considering he SI. overall u got a bland MC who is neutered. u MC and his power dosnt suit ur plot
Reborn in One Piece with Naruto System
Acnologia1234
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Thanks for your coments, I thought that since MC is just a 15 years old boy. And got reincarnated, I made him train in jungle to have him used to killing and tune his life to the one piece world. And When he faced Mihawk It is natural that he will face fear. He lived in the jungle on only thought that is Survival but facing Mihawk is Sucide which is opposite of Surviving. And though he have different moves, he doesn't have the Chakra like Naruto to sustain it. May be the plot would have seen little forced. I Will try to improve the story in a better way. Thank You.
he trained for yrs no? plus he has system no? Mihawk not fighting I'll accept, smart move but being scared of his presence was stupid. Plus, animals are more dangerous than people in one piece [ people-ie: anyone below 500 million bounty....seaking are arguable i suppose]...plus he a reincarnated person....2 souls/lives
Acnologia1234:Thanks for your coments, I thought that since MC is just a 15 years old boy. And got reincarnated, I made him train in jungle to have him used to killing and tune his life to the one piece world. And When he faced Mihawk It is natural that he will face fear. He lived in the jungle on only thought that is Survival but facing Mihawk is Sucide which is opposite of Surviving. And though he have different moves, he doesn't have the Chakra like Naruto to sustain it. May be the plot would have seen little forced. I Will try to improve the story in a better way. Thank You.
But you are thinking that just because he has a system and trained for a minimum of 2 years he can be seriously OP but he only got 1 power every 1 month and even that was random he was also a normal person before reincarnating so even if he has 'more will' he would still be scared because he trusts his instinct that had most probably helped him a lot on the island Also even though he is not fighting yet I think it's understandable to get the 'plot' starting and I don't think/want him to fight almost all the major character as it will weaken Luffy which in the long run is bad I'm not saying that he can't fight I'm just saying that he should fight starting around louge town like the author said Another thing about the SI even if he knows the knowledge doesn't mean he can beat the enemies in the future it's like I know that tomorrow a nuke will land and explode on my house even with that information what can you do about it Ik that was a bad example but that's the gist of it you need power in one piece besides devil fruit and training will only get you so far Ik that this is your opinion but your making it sound like the system makes him magically OP when he is probably a little stronger than Luffy ( not physically but with techniques/ ninjustu and taijustu) even if the plot was mainly forced it will be hard to do it anywhere else because what is he going to do follow them without the invitation seems weird however you have a right over your opinion
amaturewriter:he trained for yrs no? plus he has system no? Mihawk not fighting I'll accept, smart move but being scared of his presence was stupid. Plus, animals are more dangerous than people in one piece [ people-ie: anyone below 500 million bounty....seaking are arguable i suppose]...plus he a reincarnated person....2 souls/lives
Also It wasn't even guaranteed that he would get a power or even if it was useful to him so he wouldn't be OP with it and he still has to train that power so the system only gives him knowledge about it so can you tell me would you like a ninja in one piece(cool concept) or just a normal human who trained for 2 years and even if he had no system you would probably complain that he caught up in training and is as strong as the others ( most likely Zoro and Sanji levels) as he only trained for a short amount of time while they had way more years
my problem was MC being pathetic...him not fighting mihwak is fine, but him behaving like a btch was stupid....he lived 2 lives, he should have the strongest will.....also this dude MC gets a power every month...and he is an SI, with two souls....he is too OP, and he has a system.....and u cant say he was a normal person cause if author ignored it in his bk...well then i can ignore it too...so yah. MC is neutered...
Luckie:But you are thinking that just because he has a system and trained for a minimum of 2 years he can be seriously OP but he only got 1 power every 1 month and even that was random he was also a normal person before reincarnating so even if he has 'more will' he would still be scared because he trusts his instinct that had most probably helped him a lot on the island Also even though he is not fighting yet I think it's understandable to get the 'plot' starting and I don't think/want him to fight almost all the major character as it will weaken Luffy which in the long run is bad I'm not saying that he can't fight I'm just saying that he should fight starting around louge town like the author said Another thing about the SI even if he knows the knowledge doesn't mean he can beat the enemies in the future it's like I know that tomorrow a nuke will land and explode on my house even with that information what can you do about it Ik that was a bad example but that's the gist of it you need power in one piece besides devil fruit and training will only get you so far Ik that this is your opinion but your making it sound like the system makes him magically OP when he is probably a little stronger than Luffy ( not physically but with techniques/ ninjustu and taijustu) even if the plot was mainly forced it will be hard to do it anywhere else because what is he going to do follow them without the invitation seems weird however you have a right over your opinion
u are under estimating the system....if we use this logic...MC should've died considering he cant even navigate the seas/cook food cause he a normie...And to journey the one piece [any one of its ] seas u need to be proper sailor with yrs of experience....so yah,,,,ur points are irrelevant....mind u I am using ur same logic
Luckie:Also It wasn't even guaranteed that he would get a power or even if it was useful to him so he wouldn't be OP with it and he still has to train that power so the system only gives him knowledge about it so can you tell me would you like a ninja in one piece(cool concept) or just a normal human who trained for 2 years and even if he had no system you would probably complain that he caught up in training and is as strong as the others ( most likely Zoro and Sanji levels) as he only trained for a short amount of time while they had way more years
kabuto who was cannon forder became beyond S rank within months, same with obito [ within about a yr he went for a barely an adept genin to a kage level beast...he was only 14/15, and his training before this was barely there].......sakura, within 3 yrs became a high jonin lvl threat. kid grandson of hiruzen was also extremely strong with in 3 or so yrs of training,,,,having jonin level stats
Luckie:Also It wasn't even guaranteed that he would get a power or even if it was useful to him so he wouldn't be OP with it and he still has to train that power so the system only gives him knowledge about it so can you tell me would you like a ninja in one piece(cool concept) or just a normal human who trained for 2 years and even if he had no system you would probably complain that he caught up in training and is as strong as the others ( most likely Zoro and Sanji levels) as he only trained for a short amount of time while they had way more years
dont assume u are me...I said MC is to weak for his all the **** he has....dont make assumptions on ur thoughts and pass them of as mine
Luckie:Also It wasn't even guaranteed that he would get a power or even if it was useful to him so he wouldn't be OP with it and he still has to train that power so the system only gives him knowledge about it so can you tell me would you like a ninja in one piece(cool concept) or just a normal human who trained for 2 years and even if he had no system you would probably complain that he caught up in training and is as strong as the others ( most likely Zoro and Sanji levels) as he only trained for a short amount of time while they had way more years
this is why i hate system novels. because people like you think giving a character life advantages don't make him better than a average person, but because he his the mc he has to compete with the best. if the system doesn't show growth then it's not needed. people without one can step on the mc so what is it good for.
Luckie:But you are thinking that just because he has a system and trained for a minimum of 2 years he can be seriously OP but he only got 1 power every 1 month and even that was random he was also a normal person before reincarnating so even if he has 'more will' he would still be scared because he trusts his instinct that had most probably helped him a lot on the island Also even though he is not fighting yet I think it's understandable to get the 'plot' starting and I don't think/want him to fight almost all the major character as it will weaken Luffy which in the long run is bad I'm not saying that he can't fight I'm just saying that he should fight starting around louge town like the author said Another thing about the SI even if he knows the knowledge doesn't mean he can beat the enemies in the future it's like I know that tomorrow a nuke will land and explode on my house even with that information what can you do about it Ik that was a bad example but that's the gist of it you need power in one piece besides devil fruit and training will only get you so far Ik that this is your opinion but your making it sound like the system makes him magically OP when he is probably a little stronger than Luffy ( not physically but with techniques/ ninjustu and taijustu) even if the plot was mainly forced it will be hard to do it anywhere else because what is he going to do follow them without the invitation seems weird however you have a right over your opinion
Luckie:But you are thinking that just because he has a system and trained for a minimum of 2 years he can be seriously OP but he only got 1 power every 1 month and even that was random he was also a normal person before reincarnating so even if he has 'more will' he would still be scared because he trusts his instinct that had most probably helped him a lot on the island Also even though he is not fighting yet I think it's understandable to get the 'plot' starting and I don't think/want him to fight almost all the major character as it will weaken Luffy which in the long run is bad I'm not saying that he can't fight I'm just saying that he should fight starting around louge town like the author said Another thing about the SI even if he knows the knowledge doesn't mean he can beat the enemies in the future it's like I know that tomorrow a nuke will land and explode on my house even with that information what can you do about it Ik that was a bad example but that's the gist of it you need power in one piece besides devil fruit and training will only get you so far Ik that this is your opinion but your making it sound like the system makes him magically OP when he is probably a little stronger than Luffy ( not physically but with techniques/ ninjustu and taijustu) even if the plot was mainly forced it will be hard to do it anywhere else because what is he going to do follow them without the invitation seems weird however you have a right over your opinion
Infamous_Fitz:It's the authors fault fo making a system that doesn't fit the world that like having a dbz system in RWBY it would never work
amaturewriter:my problem was MC being pathetic...him not fighting mihwak is fine, but him behaving like a btch was stupid....he lived 2 lives, he should have the strongest will.....also this dude MC gets a power every month...and he is an SI, with two souls....he is too OP, and he has a system.....and u cant say he was a normal person cause if author ignored it in his bk...well then i can ignore it too...so yah. MC is neutered...