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DaoistSpiritTurtle
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2021-01-04 15:49

The story is pretty good so far, I've only read 40 chapters at the time of this review. The mc acts as he was portrayed to be in the introduction so there are no problems there. The world background and grammar usage are pretty solid as well, nothing crazy but it is good. My main gripe with this novel is the way the author handles time skips. Time skips are a staple of the cultivation genre so its pretty much expected that there will be some, the problem though is that when time skips happen in this story it feels like time only moved forward for the mc. Ex: Mc does something that would create trouble for the country he was in and flees to another country. While in country number 2 there is a time skip of several years after which mc returns to country 1. None of the consequences of the mcs actions at country 1 have played out during the time skip, but after mcs return the consequences suddenly start playing out. Personally I think the author needs to look at how he handled these time skips and correct his handling of them at least with whatever time skips come later. If possible I would suggest he goes back and edits the early chapters and make a couple changes to the story so it doesn't seem like things only happen when the mc is around. I'm not saying that he can't only focus on the mcs perspective because there isn't anything wrong with that, just that things should be able to progress even when he isn't physically present.

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