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2021-01-30 22:11

Great Grammar and writing. the characters fit their world perfectly which some novels fail at doing. What I didnt like: it reminded be of every wattpad novel, 🤦🏽‍♀️ The female lead was either socially inept (wHere she couldnt read a room) or just dumb. Melody speaks A LOT and most times about nothing. she rants about Jason and thats about it😂😂😂 Jason hates Melody for Some reason, and i doubt it would be for anything other than his love for her. 😪 (so nothing new) Melody’s reaction to real life situations was off putting. Im like girl can you “Shut up, he has a damn knife” 😂😂😂 I personally won’t keep reading, cause These stories really arent for my demographic, it seems a bit childish and played out. (I’m 22 btw) Also i’ve had my fill of all these types of stories. Overall keep up the great writing, and if you arent contracted you should post your work in wattpad you will make a killing tbh.

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