Review Detail of mrmrcia in SUPERHERO GETS A GRANDPA SYSTEM

Comparing the author's writing style from Mad Genius and this novel, I can pretty much say that you've effectively modified your writing style to one that can be a lot more immersive. You were able to convey more relatable emotions and transitional phrases are very effective. This novel has a very refreshing vibe to it, brought by its straightforward narration. Gramps is really oozing out the boomer vibe. And Kyle, dear Kyle is the kid that he is. I hope Samira toughens up! I advised you about putting a tad more descriptions after dialogues, and you effectively incorporated that. I think you could be more creative in your word choices and how you describe things. Also, watch out for run-ons/comma splices, it still a problem of yours. The world is still a tad too hazy to me, so I would like it if there's like, a more extensive elucidation on it. Overall, please continue this till the end! I will be supporting you, stray! (Sorry if I was not helpful enough)