Story is very hard to read at least early for me, it's a combination of questionable grammar and sentence structure, weird pacing and unexplained concepts. It felt really hard to immerse myself when I had to reread several paragraphs a chapter to try and understand what's going on and still end up asking "what's this? What's that? When was that explained?" the premise itself is very interesting and has potential for world building and maybe it gets better later but I couldn't force myself to push through it. In all this is in desperate need of an editor.
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