Review Detail of mrmrcia in This is My Choice

I gave you five stars to encourage you to continue in writing this story. However, please don't be complacent on your skills. All of us are still improving, and so are you! Let's encourage each other! :> Now, it's only the first chapter, but I advise you to update daily to get more readers. I don't have any say regarding the flow of the plot yet. Withal, I could surmise that Zander is quite the hotheaded character while Carl and Ivan are the naughty types. On the other hand, I have a lot of qualms regarding the technicalities in writing. In the dialogues, after the quotations, the letters should be capitalized. Moreover, the verb tenses are quite inconsistent. It is more preferrable to use the past tense form of the verbs. In addition to that, there were a myriad of misuse/absence of punctuation marks, leading to run-ons/comma splices. Nevertheless, remember that these mistakes are easily proofread, and correcting them will make your passages look more neat. :> Overall, please be confident in writing as it reflects on how you write your passages. I'll be supporting you!