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I won't mind story development for now since there is basically a single chapter when I wrote this review. So, the Onomatopoeia in this novel is great. Some dialogues are capitalized and I understand it is for the sake of emphasis and exaggeration but for others it might seem too much. You only need three exclamation points and not a dozen but I'm fine with it having many but for other readers it may not. That is the only thing I have to criticize about. Ok, the first chapter the characters were introduced. I was able to picture them in a few paragraphs just by the way the author describes them and by how they speak. As for grammar, I'll keep things even. I am not a grammar specialist so I do not have the right to judge the grammar of this book. Keep up the good work and keep on writing! Good luck