Review Detail of Sly_Lyon in It all started when I turned 18

The writing is messy, the prologue is boring and so is the first chapter. The flow is forced, the characters are too many, vague and bland. They get introduced too quickly without enough light to shine on them. The sentence structure is nothing special. All in all, I'd drop this book after the second paragraph. Honestly, after the prologue. The writing needs to be polished a lot more.