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Telenovela609
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2020-07-27 07:56

This story has some problem on the grammar here and there, but it was overall a good read nevertheless. We need more kind of this story tbh, but it needs fixing as of now.

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Ibisen
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Thank you, I'll keep working on my grammar and keep a better eye out.

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Another one of my random reviews as suggested by Discord! Today, I stumbled upon this story here and I'd like to share with you, what I thought while reading it, without spoiling anything for new readers. This review is gonna try and cover why all the categories got a five-star rating from me and I urge people to read this book no matter what my review says and make up your minds on your own. That said let's begin! The premise of this novel is fascinating and memorable because of how unique its setting is. I am very positively surprised by how intrigued I was with everything right away. The writing quality has a lot to do with that so let’s talk about that. Right from the first chapter, it becomes obvious that the author has perhaps a better grasp of English than he would give himself credit for. That is a very good thing and here is why. Whenever an author succeeds, at presenting well thought out sentence structures, the reader's experience becomes seamless. This becomes especially obvious when following a storyline that crosses into a new chapter from a previous one. This has been of no issue here to my great relief. The only suggestion I can think of, in regards to the writing, would be to experiment a little with the formatting. I have read this story both, on mobile and PC and noticed that some paragraphs in chapter eight, for example, become large blocks of text on the mobile version but this comes down to preference. As of the time of this review, the story has eight chapters in total and I eagerly anticipate its upcoming releases. That is unfortunately all I can say in regards to release frequency. The story development was done brilliantly, nothing felt rushed or drawn out. Details and information were smoothly worked into the story without dumping any of it. The characters are a mix of ordinary, everyday life, and very unique traits. I am excited to see how they and the world they live in continue to grow and change over time. I will continue to follow up on this story and I think you should too. I also want to thank the author for reaching out to me on discord! Should you visit there, give a shout-out to the author or me! I'd love to discuss this story and hear what you thought of it there!

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