Review Detail of Mateus_Belmond in My life in Harry Potter( Rewrite coming soon)

i don't know english, i'm writing with google translator. 1: wish fulfillment story, it doesn't bother me. for me the whole story is like that at some level. what pisses me off is the amount of BS. 2: the MC has no depth, wants to act smart but looks like a donkey who makes decisions on impulse that only work because of BS. 3: the MC looks like a maniac and a cartoon villain who only wins because of BS. seriously, he manipulates 7 year old girls. 4:11 who looks like a teenager? WTF? the magic in Harry Potter never showed it and never hinted that it could do this naturally. 5: every time the MC is going to do a scene I am ashamed of his thoughts, he is a child but do adults still take him seriously? i know that hp wizards are not the knife more sharp but be serious. 6: do girls listen to him instead of their parents? WTF? hard to believe. look, I don't know if this was a constructive criticism, I don't want to offend the author, I'm just giving my opinion. compared to other fanfics this is very good, but it has a lot of BS and looks stupid. I recommend you read it, but I will not continue, this story is not bad, but it does not suit me. do not judge this story too fast, it is good for those who do not care about much BS. if the author is offended, sorry, it was not my intention.