Nice and realistic story, I like how the MC needs a wake up call as I always considered idiotic how all the Reincarnators decide to train relentlessly and become strong the moment they wake up, it's stupid, none of us first world people would start an harsh training regiment without having similar experiences before reincarnation or a concrete and urgent need for it, come on we all think that martial arts are cool as ****, but how many do actually start practicing them without abandoning after few moths at most?

Started of good but know they basically have become monster. slapping little girls and shit and I like the merchant angle but he is a man with the king's haki who hides? like wtf. And he cant change the main plot? Barto club was in the main plot. what if he got his devil fruit from a pirate you killed.. Just saying it's good but if your going to made him a coward who cannot change anything.

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MC is disgusting, he was letting his mother be ****ed by some random pirate, not only that, he is a 25 yes old reincarnated person that should know the cruelty of one piece world, but this disgusting disgrace to MCs sat on his ass for 2 yrs doing little to no physical exercise, cowarding in front of pirated that were about to r@pe his mother, this is the most disgusting ff on webnovel, author should feel shame on writing something as such just for character development that was nowhere to be seen. I say dodge it like a bullet of shiit

I dont like the beggining of the story at all. MC is a total idiot. Author decides having netorare, letting pirates almost raped her mother at the beggining of the story. Damn, should never had read it. Add Netorare tags, my goodness. Also whats with the simp personality, his a reincarnated individual, he was mentally older. Damn.

MC is a complete weakling. Then the author forces something dark and the mc is a weakling so cant do anything lol even though he shouldn’t be! Then later they start to act weak in front of people so they seem to be just common people. Like wtf? This isn’t some cliche cultivation world that they will kidnap your family after you beat them when you are literally so far from home and many people could have similar to the same names lol waste of time.

TRASHHHH.....TRASSHHHH...TRRAAASHHHHHHH.....

Another author failing to grasp dark does not equal deep. Your main character has all the tools required to pursue personal strength but does not do so in the slightest. You could have had him just train for an hour a day and still have all scenes play out the same way, with the difference being the MC doesn't come across as arrogant and self indolgent. The cliche advice thrown around for new writers is show don't tell, which is the exact problem with this fiction. You say he cares about his mother, but none of his actions lead the audience to believe that. By placing zero effort into protecting his own life and by extension those around him he has shown the value he places in them, zero. This would all be perfectly fine if the character was 5, they're not however and as such your character comes off as aggressively unlikable. It's okay to have dark serious themes in a fandom that doesn't traditionally see too much of it, however this should not be at the cost of the rational thought of the protagonist. You don't need to make the choice the audience wants but it needs to be one they can see themselves making in the situation to be relatable, and your MC has not done that.

mc is a coward even tho he has limitless body and cheats but still weak. This type of fanfic not my style. Mc acting like a pussy just annoys me no matter how realistic it is. Grammer and structure is good. I like the oc’s in it but that’s bout it

This is my novel, so of course I will give myself five star. This is my first time, writing anything. Any type of criticism, I will gladly take it. I hope it will take me away from [Noob Author] status. I hope everyone will have a great time reading it.