Review Detail of EldritchTheDead in Broken Lips

I love how the writer imagines every scenario and displaces the describing with profound suggestion and metaphors in its stead. It’s quite immersive since the writing style definitely grabs your attention as it leaves you in the situation itself. Since it’s your first time, it’s very understandable to have certain mistakes here and there. The overcompensating of words to explain each scenario are a bit too much that leaves the reader with quite a lot to process in mind therefore would hinder reading enjoyment. A little advice, use the metaphorical power you have to place them in situations where instead of having to word out the scenario but will suggest it. Anyways I would still recommend the story. Best wishes you author! Hopefully this would help you in the nearby future.