I never thought that I would like this story more than how I adore it right now. Lynn is such a strong woman that knows when to place her emotions over reason. It might've been a heartbreaking decision for her to see Garrett get married to someone else, but she knew better than to be selfish. She suffered several training sessions just to better herself in the art of a bout. The efforts that she exerted in those few months towered over some princess' lifetime effort of etiquette lessons. I could pretty much say that the queen and kind are taking the easy way out, letting their son marry a fellow royal. They're just adamant on not finding another way to evade being targeted by another nation. On the other hand, Garrett is a tad too passive. Rather than actively helping in the Kingdom's politics, he chose to express his childishness in front of his parents. Although, it was sweet of him to support Lynn along her journey. His love for our FML is honestly one of the sweetest thing I've read today. Lynn's father, Christian, should grow a backbone. That's your daughter not a tool. His feelings and thoughts contradicted all throughout my reading experience. I appreciate your exposition, though I think that you could be a tad more descriptive. Utilize metaphors and do not use just adjectives. Make the readers feel it instead of just plainly elucidating on the scenery in a simple manner. The way you inscribe snippets of flashbacks in the middle of chapters is also somewhat refreshing but work more on the transitions, cause it confused me at times. There were also some minor mistakes regarding questionable word choices, absence/misuse of punctuation marks, and some verb tenses. I just pointed them out to let you know that your work could look even more beautiful! I am quite contemplating the future of the story. For the reason that Lynn being a knight was the core point, if he becomes Garrett's fiance, her focus won't be on becoming at knight but a queen. I'm looking forward to her growth to be the best of both roles. The romance in between our leads is something that one would covet, and a bit painful sometimes. This is a novel that I'm sincerely inlove with. Rest assured that you're a good author! I will be supporting you!
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Ooodles and oodles of thanks!!! I will take what you say into consideration. I appreciate your thoughtfulness and constructive criticism. You, my friend, is a gem on this Earth~ ❤️
