Review Detail of amaturewriter in My teen romantic comedy is not going as I expected
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-This bk, the problem is its copy paste...like the conversations and the events, all of it are word for word cannon, with MC added and him [literally] saying one or two words,,,thats it...Plus this MC seems to be the generic bitc.h style MC, meaning this dude takes insults left and right without replying back.... Look, this FF would be dope,,,just fix some ****. Add personality or at least avoid following cannon so much, And give the MC a back gone,,,,yukino insults make him insult back, and hell make it hurt , her insults are cruel [and dont make MC apologize, IDK it would an interesting event to read]...so yah.GL...
My teen romantic comedy is not going as I expected
LowercaseGuy
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Thanks for the input. I already have three chapters besides this two written and the backstory and stuff will be explained soon. It's just my personal taste, but when I introduce an oc in a story I usually start like cannon and then his presence an future actions will lead to changes in the story, first small ones and then bigger ones. Thanks for the review and I look forward to read your opinion in the future.
LowercaseGuy:Thanks for the input. I already have three chapters besides this two written and the backstory and stuff will be explained soon. It's just my personal taste, but when I introduce an oc in a story I usually start like cannon and then his presence an future actions will lead to changes in the story, first small ones and then bigger ones. Thanks for the review and I look forward to read your opinion in the future.
isthis is a little bit different from original?.who is kiyoshiki?anime also havent chrachter like that
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