Review Detail of Nmgames in My Space-Time System

So I read all the free chapters which was like 40 something. From what I could read, there is so much to work on, just in the beginning chapters. Author should go back and fix it and if the rest of the novel is like this then it's not worth reading in my opinion. Lots of inconsistencies and information being put out with no explanation like Magic. It hurt to read it and this is as far as I go. GL