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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv44yr
2020-10-24 10:08

I found the story boring. The whole 8 chapters were cancer to my eyes to read. Bad structure and blobs of text. Moreover, what is even the plot? From what I understand mc is building a secret base but to what end? Stop Palpatine? Create an empire? I don't know! SEEMS boring. Plus what up with the whole 'Daenerys Targaryen' anti-slavery fighting thing. Isn't he a Mandalorian warrior? Why should he care about slavery in the galaxy or whatnot? From what I've seen mc was responsible directly or indirectly for the deaths of innocents so why does he somehow grow morals?

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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Stupid principals.

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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

None! Slavery is evil full stop! However, I hate mc's who try to justify themselves as good and then do other evil stuff and forget about it. Plus it all seems forced like why the heck would he care about slaves if he isn't a good person or a hero? It's not like he had some sort of reason fur a crusade against it, it is one thing if he was enslaved and gained sympathy with slaves. Here mc just kills innocents but somehow thinks slavery is something he cares about.

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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Yes, I understand but 'hate' is a very strong emotion and something which only occurs if you have personally experienced something concerning that. If a random person reincarnates into Rome, which is filled with slavery most likely that person would adapt to his situation. He doesn't have to like slavery however he wouldn't start killing slavers or people who own slaves. Humans after all are very adaptive. Here the author didn't really give us a good reason for mc hate, we know he isn't a good person, that's why I feel its forced.

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