Review Detail of Jackal_Zirson in Magus and Wizards

This isnt the worst thing ive read on here, it has some stellar writing, good grammar and an interesting character but 1- Albus is acting really out of character, i dont see him obliviating Alexanders family 2- he gets to strong to quick, the fun of the system genre is seeing characters develop and grow in strength, you cant just give him god skills and expect the same feeling.