Review Detail of Tyyx_4u in I am Iron Man

The story idea (MC with a system) is pretty good, although it develops slow and fast. Let me explain, the chapters are somewhat short and there seem to be abrupt time jumps without arguments. In general it is a fanfic with potential but there is a critical flaw, the quality of the writing. The style and form can be improved to be much more comprehensible and fluid, otherwise good work, I hope it is not abandoned.