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Straight to the point. The story is interesting and raises the idea of an MC that will serve as support for the "heroes" to save worlds in order to save their own. Nothing more than mere survival, but it is unlikely that they would risk their necks on other worlds (maybe just the "hero complex") Here we start with the first "stumble" for me. The MC looked promising, logical and conservative asking why would he want to risk his life? That dialogue came from logic, it seemed perfect to me until the "director" gives his daughter to be his fiancée (No money, resources, skills, NOTHING) and the MC accepts ... sigh. Second "stumble" the MC is drugged (actually unconscious) to do a test of who knows what and there they discover his potential for support and kindly ask him (they force him) to accept. Not so bad, right? Well, the relationship with the first heroine has to do with this because she somehow falls in love with the MC at that time. (MC with blocked memories). The MC as a normal human feels uncomfortable with this but lets it pass because she is his "fiancee" ... Third "stumble" MC and his relationships go from 0 to 100, too fast and forced. It is also kind of simple because as long as you are a woman he will not do anything to you. (A princess is constantly insulting and denigrating him and his fiancee who is the heroine who owns the party lets it pass as if nothing happened) I'm sure that if the princess was a prince they would have already eliminated him. (This is the problem of the Harem in general and although I like the harem I have always found this annoying so it does not even serve to justify it) Conclusion: Disappointed. I couldn't get past a certain chapter and therefore the bugs that I found can be fixed later but all of the above made me quit. I consider his other novel much better than irony that it has a better romance and even more logical than this.
The Ultimate Support Character
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Thanks for a detailed review. I don't know what to say and the things you pointed out were really something I also noticed. For the first stumble: He was put in a situation where he had no choice but to accept. Seeing how he was binded during the questioning. Maybe it didn't look like that but that's the idea I put out there. For the second and third stumble: I also intended for the things to be explained and revealed later in the chapters. Why does he have a blank in his memory and what's in it, why the first girl is in love with him. That's all intentional. About the forced relationship, that's spot on so it took some time for me to edit the chapters covering the first world . Only finishing it today, though it might still look forced but I toned it down drastically. It's a bit hard to convey the whole plot especially like this when I'm using only one perspective just like my other novel . Slowly unraveling the mystery and the story behind each and every actions shown Err. I chose to use this so it's still on me. I couldn't make it as perfect as a plot but some things couldn't be changed now or I need to rewrite it from the start.
No problem, that's why I put "stumble" in quotes because more than that are details that he found that may be part of the plot and / or that can be resolved later. I only gave my opinion that the story was a bit heavy for me because of that, anyway I do not criticize your writing style since I like your other novel. Maybe I will try again in the future but for now I do not feel anxious to continue, I will still be supportive in your other job.
Dyrem:Thanks for a detailed review. I don't know what to say and the things you pointed out were really something I also noticed. For the first stumble: He was put in a situation where he had no choice but to accept. Seeing how he was binded during the questioning. Maybe it didn't look like that but that's the idea I put out there. For the second and third stumble: I also intended for the things to be explained and revealed later in the chapters. Why does he have a blank in his memory and what's in it, why the first girl is in love with him. That's all intentional. About the forced relationship, that's spot on so it took some time for me to edit the chapters covering the first world . Only finishing it today, though it might still look forced but I toned it down drastically. It's a bit hard to convey the whole plot especially like this when I'm using only one perspective just like my other novel . Slowly unraveling the mystery and the story behind each and every actions shown Err. I chose to use this so it's still on me. I couldn't make it as perfect as a plot but some things couldn't be changed now or I need to rewrite it from the start.