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Review Detail of Throdan in The Ultimate Support Character

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Throdan
ThrodanLv153yrThrodan

So ill start with the postives and ill work into the things i think need work You have a good system style for the system genre i like the style of rapid growth with small bonuses collected from multiple worlds style I love your world building so far you could probably be a very talented DM for dungeons and dragons and i respect the quality Your male characters overwhelmingly are well written and varied even the assholeish Second hero Cons- mostly just to deal with the AMOUNT of harem girls you seem to have planned its overwhelming and itll be impossible to even remeber their names i think if you are seriously planning for 60 girls And this brings up the other topics even the “main Wife” vibe character just screams generic harem fodder your female characters need some variance because even the stealth girl in the second world i literally saw the begrudging attraction first chapter after their meeting i can accept fate makes these girls fall for protagonist but it needs some more finesse to not just have the worst self fulfillment fanfic vibe

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The Ultimate Support Character

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Dyrem
DyremAuthorDyrem

Don't worry it won't be as large as that. lol And yeah I see the flaw how the relationships looks forced. I read enough complaints about it. I'll try to improve it in the future chapters.

Throdan
ThrodanLv15Throdan

Its overall good though i enjoy It do far keep it up but if you cant find a way to make it less.... (Self Insert vibed) you should make it less overall

Dyrem:Don't worry it won't be as large as that. lol And yeah I see the flaw how the relationships looks forced. I read enough complaints about it. I'll try to improve it in the future chapters.