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This limit thing is dumb, really makes spam be the more likely approach, anyway. The writing in itself is not bad, didn't see many mistakes if any, the rest is the problem, relationships turn from 0 to 100 real fast, a few hours change everything, didn't help to give depth to characters or make said relationships compelling. The Story is somewhat awkward, the development until the point I read didn't appeal to me and was kind of beaten down by how poorly I felt the relationships developed. The characters seem one dimensional, without depth and completely passive to the world around them, "Oh okay I accept being the support of thirty different people in a setting with real danger and with little to no real benefit besides getting a fiance that fell in love with me at first sight." c'mon, I know how plagued by such things the Isekai genre is, but generally, the typical protagonist is not given a choice he's just suddenly in another world and is screwed, this one made a choice, for me it was the wrong one. Finally, the world or worlds were simply not described, left entirely to the imagination of the reader, it'll already be a challenge in and of itself to make dozens of legitimately compelling worlds, not even bothering to describe them will not help. This story is clearly being written by a beginner author, so let me give a little advice, plan a little ahead, give time to your characters to develop themselves and their relationships, and invest in the world you are creating if you want people to like your story. You don't need to describe the texture of the pebble by the side of the road, but what I'd like to know is, how is the school, how do the characters look, do they have a uniform, does the clairvoyant old man have a huge beard, does the bro-con princess have amber eyes?
The Ultimate Support Character
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I took my time to comment on this review as mostly what was written here was true. I edited the chapters that covered the first world and I still couldn't say I lived up to the complaints written here. My novel was written in the first person perspective so everything you will read is taken from the MC's own eyes. The first world really wasn't described that much so I filled up the gaps during the editing. Ah anyway. Just saying that the novel was already different from when this review was written back then . And. Thanks for the tips. It were really helpful on the chapters after this review was written
no seperation as such, as he can always go back whenever he wants. It's just that he has such a huge harem that he barely gets to go back, he instead goes about getting harem members like catching pokemon. Honestly i dont't like harem, but because of the isekai concept and support character concept i decided to give this story a chance, and it is good. Like the power progression, fights and stuff are good. The relationships and the ever-increasing harem on the other hand... At first i was pretty mad, but after reaching a certain number you just stop caring and just accept that harem members aren't characters but an addition to a list on his status page. Let's roll the waifu gacha again, which waifu trope do we get in the next world? Gotta catch em' all
StarShifter:Are there any long separation like in CN where mc moves from one harem meMber to another ?
I mean did he? I haven't read that much only on the start of 3rd world one because this got dumped in the novels I forgot to read, but I haven't seen any behavior that leads to the mc having a pokemon-like harem
ThePotatoKing:no seperation as such, as he can always go back whenever he wants. It's just that he has such a huge harem that he barely gets to go back, he instead goes about getting harem members like catching pokemon. Honestly i dont't like harem, but because of the isekai concept and support character concept i decided to give this story a chance, and it is good. Like the power progression, fights and stuff are good. The relationships and the ever-increasing harem on the other hand... At first i was pretty mad, but after reaching a certain number you just stop caring and just accept that harem members aren't characters but an addition to a list on his status page. Let's roll the waifu gacha again, which waifu trope do we get in the next world? Gotta catch em' all