Review Detail of reb1 in The Gamer Avenger

author please stop and reevaluate your novel because your rushing the story too much making it hard to read especially since it has quite interesting plot point that should be taken one at a time like how he was there at the start of the universe and how it time skipped to easily and if he has gamers mind why is he so irrational with his decisions especially when going to shield for a membership position when he could just rule the world if he slowly built himself up when he escaped shield plus i felt like he probably shouldn't have left that note because he gives himself away to much but i do feel like you should have stuck with that jason bourne aspect where he's an elusive character to shield cause it makes a good side cat and mouse game especially since he has stealth and cloaking and maybe teleportation and you know what would be a better plot if you change the story to be where he lands in spain in the 14th century and he gets injured from the landing because the system can only cover him so much when he fall from the sky and he gets injured on his side and starts bleeding so he has to go through a system recovery mode turning invisible and the system turning him old to conserve energy so the system can help him recover and as he escapes from the crash site he has to has escape into a alley and turns his blood invisible as he escapes making him less visible to track and when gets into the alley he finds a cart to to have to take a rest and uses it as a wheelchair