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2020-07-25 21:34

I really love the plot, the descriptions, the word usage; everything. You described the places very well. I just think that you could use another round of editing for the grammar. Some sentences were missing prepositions or punctuation or other things hence confusing the reader. Your usage of the third person for all characters is also great, however, it would be better described by the main character if she/he were to be the narrator. It's still amazing the way it is. Both ways are exceptional, however I prefer having the main character(s) narrate the story, but that depends on preferences or the story itself. Also, a little more descriptions of the characters could do you some good. There may be some not the way considering that I haven't fully finished the reading the book, but the beginning didn't include as much. It did consist of some, though they weren't detailed. There were some unnecessary repetitions as well. The room was very specifically described, as well as the items in it, so that's a transcendent job. I enjoyed the various cliffhangers even though I hate cliffhangers in general, but it was proper to excite your audience to read more from you. Albeit you have errors, everyone has them, and it is completely common and humane. You are a vast and skilled writer, and this one only my opinion; honest review. I give advice; you choose ^^ Overall, I fancy your story! It seems very, very enjoyable. I can't wait to find out how the hybrid was tamed!!!

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