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2020-07-10 18:27

This fanfic is one of the best I have to react, it easy to read, it has a solid build for store and plot, the prologue is better albeit longer than most fanfic, the tragedy or betrayal doesn't feel like a half-assed betrayal when the girl suddenly turns to complete ***** in period from good to evil in instant, the male doesn't feel like a beta male who easily fooled. The downside is the characteristic and action of mc in the story feel like a copy-paste character of Jin-woo, like in the dungeon before awakening or checking his magic in-hospital and some more, there still an original event but there too many events that copying original solo leveling even the location is different (japan-Korea). As for characteristic, it feels similar to Jin-woo thought, it is a logical turn event but the MC will be just copy of Jin-Woo at this rate, my advice is to develop MC character to a more distinctive personality maybe or closer to real one or other type but still realistic, it will make the story more create to showing other people struggling in a different manner than original MC and make MC for special other than his power.

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