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Review Detail of Tofu_eating_Cat in "Peaceful" Life in a Different World

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The story has a simplicity that was endearing at first. The story structure, MC internal monologue and thought patterns are done well. Scenes are shown instead of told which gives it a nice quality touch. Sadly the story failed absolutely in the dialogues. It's all: "blah blah blah?" he/she asked. "blah blah blah." he said. No descriptive lines how the question or sentence was presented. Or worst: "blah blah blah." "blah blah blah." "blah blah blah." "blah blah blah." (two people talking here with no identification or distinctions). The conversations themselves feel like 2 people who just learned the English language. Extremely short and simple/banal. If the author would just read up on how to write a dialogue or a Beta Reader then I would easily bump this story up a star and a half. Wish the author and translator best of luck.

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"Peaceful" Life in a Different World

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