Review Detail of Neil_Ads in Into the Zombie World
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Caution! I've made a mistake and there is a lot of info dump in the early chapters. Although I cannot guarantee it, I am doing my best not to repeat this in the future. This story revolves on the Main Character Nile who transmigrated in the world full of zombie. I will focus on him and his development. As a newbie author, I know I will make a lot mistakes during this journey. I apologize in advance for that. I am open for critics(no harsh words please), that way I know where I am lacking and what should I improve more. If you have any suggestions and tips to improve my writing, please do tell me about it.
Into the Zombie World
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Make the story go slower it moves too fast and because of that it’s difficult to piece things together. Explain what everything does such as the ammo Types don’t expect people to know the power of each weapons strength just because you say they are good(make the character react over dramatically). Also finally you have to scale every time the main character get a bit stronger such as the beginning it says all his stats are 1 and 1.5 you can’t tell if 1 means Adverage human’s strength or a malnutrition one then when his stats jump to 4 what does the 4 even mean theres never anything spefic about how much 1 point equals.
I suggest you remove the Comedy tag on the novel though i get you want to make afew jokes sometimes you shouldn’t deliberately say there is comedy because comedy/zombie apocalypse with a system just don’t add up and people will start to expect what the tags say there is in the novel and more or less you will confuse the readers expecting something and i actually got confused
yeah, to be honest, when i started this novel, that tags are what is recommended and I just clicked each of them until I run out of tags. lol. Still, I won't remove the comedy tag, I wanted to improve in this aspect and I will not stop myself on making some silly jokes inside the novel. Also, I saw your comments and to be honest, it was pretty helpful. I was able to know the things I havent considered when wrting a chapter. Thank you so much, I will definitely improve thanks to you.
N0B0DY3:I suggest you remove the Comedy tag on the novel though i get you want to make afew jokes sometimes you shouldn’t deliberately say there is comedy because comedy/zombie apocalypse with a system just don’t add up and people will start to expect what the tags say there is in the novel and more or less you will confuse the readers expecting something and i actually got confused
Neil_Ads:yeah, to be honest, when i started this novel, that tags are what is recommended and I just clicked each of them until I run out of tags. lol. Still, I won't remove the comedy tag, I wanted to improve in this aspect and I will not stop myself on making some silly jokes inside the novel. Also, I saw your comments and to be honest, it was pretty helpful. I was able to know the things I havent considered when wrting a chapter. Thank you so much, I will definitely improve thanks to you.
