Review Detail of Fatty_Cream in THE END OF LIFE
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Alright i read 20 chapters in, and yeah its quite solid especially with the author clarifying its their first rodeo i believe. Now its not without its faults, lets get the big hurdle out of the way, the main character is a big mary sue. Not really a spoiler as around 18 chapters in its revealed hes had "sword and gun training" and that he was " a genius" who quit because he found it boring. Not to mention his perfect figure and attractive features the first chapter in. Look, you can enjoy this for what it is especially when there is a lot worst, there are no overbearing cliches here. Well aside from Mr Perfect MC. He does struggle but at a superficial level. Also minor gripe, his actions and thoughts being somewhat contradictory? He thinks others are a burden while risking his hide for an inhaler, that isnt to say human beings aren't flexible and contradictory in nature. So thats not really a major issue but i felt it should atleast be addressed. OH, lets talk about the only female 20 chapters in who's an office worker who coincidentally is a kendo three time championship who also coincidentally has a kantana sword becuase coincidentally it was her first day on the job... Idk it could happen but very unlikely and it just had me rolling my eyes E N ways thats about it. Have a good one.
THE END OF LIFE
Cruchymonster
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Thank you for reading the book but I have only one thing which felt is wrong in your words. The thing about the girl and swords. It isn't coincidental and if you continue you to read more you will understand why she had a sword. It hurta me a little when you say this cause I left that intentionally and many people who read the book had the same reaction as you and it's justifiable. But they still read and when they reached the chapter which covers this topic a little they understood more about this woman. So I can only ask you to read a bit more before the mistaken is pointed out. One more thing the character only looks good and has some skills to survive a disaster but he is very far from being an all good character like you pointed him to be. Once again the MC isn't fully revealed and is slowly revealed through the chapters. But if you are fed up about my book and do t wanna continue than thank you for reading the book.
And about the inhaler if you read the chapter clearly. HE HAD A REASON TO GO DOWN AND IT WASNT THE INHALER. My MC isn't a guy who knows about fighting zombies from the get go like other books you might have read. So he went down to test his skills and the zombie features. So he had to go down and the inhaler was just an excuse. I am explaining this to you again even after it was written in the chapter only cause you seem to not understand my book. Once again thank you for reading my book
Imma be brutally honest with you, thats not really a satisfactory reason. I had to piece it in my head as his arrogance and recklessness, tied in with a desire to improve. But the way the character is structured neither of these mattered as i already knew he was basically modeled as a muscular dude needing to overcome his fear. But what about his selfishness, his actions betray his rationale. You know your character better than i do, but it just feels like he's a set piece rather then a person. Anyways have a good one
Cruchymonster:And about the inhaler if you read the chapter clearly. HE HAD A REASON TO GO DOWN AND IT WASNT THE INHALER. My MC isn't a guy who knows about fighting zombies from the get go like other books you might have read. So he went down to test his skills and the zombie features. So he had to go down and the inhaler was just an excuse. I am explaining this to you again even after it was written in the chapter only cause you seem to not understand my book. Once again thank you for reading my book
Ok ill give you the benefit of the doubt that shes got a lot more deph, and im sorry im really critical. You have a lot more talent than what qidian translaters pick up, none of this is really breaking ground however it doesnt tread on anything that's already been done. All in all i admire that you wrote something much more competent than 90% of novels on this site. God bless i hope to see you improve and write better and more amazing novels
Cruchymonster:Thank you for reading the book but I have only one thing which felt is wrong in your words. The thing about the girl and swords. It isn't coincidental and if you continue you to read more you will understand why she had a sword. It hurta me a little when you say this cause I left that intentionally and many people who read the book had the same reaction as you and it's justifiable. But they still read and when they reached the chapter which covers this topic a little they understood more about this woman. So I can only ask you to read a bit more before the mistaken is pointed out. One more thing the character only looks good and has some skills to survive a disaster but he is very far from being an all good character like you pointed him to be. Once again the MC isn't fully revealed and is slowly revealed through the chapters. But if you are fed up about my book and do t wanna continue than thank you for reading the book.
Sigh I tried to explain he was still selfish in that area. But it seems like I wasn't able to. In all honesty I can only say thanks for reading my book and nothing else.
Fatty_Cream:Imma be brutally honest with you, thats not really a satisfactory reason. I had to piece it in my head as his arrogance and recklessness, tied in with a desire to improve. But the way the character is structured neither of these mattered as i already knew he was basically modeled as a muscular dude needing to overcome his fear. But what about his selfishness, his actions betray his rationale. You know your character better than i do, but it just feels like he's a set piece rather then a person. Anyways have a good one
Thank you for your support and I will try my best. If I sounded rude I apologize for it. It was only cause I saw ur 3.5 rating and wanted to clarify the misunderstanding u had
Fatty_Cream:Ok ill give you the benefit of the doubt that shes got a lot more deph, and im sorry im really critical. You have a lot more talent than what qidian translaters pick up, none of this is really breaking ground however it doesnt tread on anything that's already been done. All in all i admire that you wrote something much more competent than 90% of novels on this site. God bless i hope to see you improve and write better and more amazing novels
Thank you for your support and I will try my best. If I sounded rude I apologize for it. It was only cause I saw ur 3.5 rating and wanted to clarify the misunderstanding u had
Fatty_Cream:Ok ill give you the benefit of the doubt that shes got a lot more deph, and im sorry im really critical. You have a lot more talent than what qidian translaters pick up, none of this is really breaking ground however it doesnt tread on anything that's already been done. All in all i admire that you wrote something much more competent than 90% of novels on this site. God bless i hope to see you improve and write better and more amazing novels
