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At first, I kinda liked the story, it had a pretty OP Mc that wasn't an omnipotent being, the story was going pretty good, there were a few hefty time skips but hey the MC was in development stages. Then the MC became a hypocrite, she doesn't like reincarnations trying to impress younger girls to possibly get them into their harem, calls them pedophiles. Yet, the second world she goes to she gets together with a beast girl child/teenager. She also, rightly might I add, thinks that a reincarnator using a mind control ability on females is rape. In later chapters she proceeds to inject a love potion into a girl who wants to be with her. Now that we have covered the relationship issues I saw, lets get down to some other stuff. The time Skips. The Author has put at least 1 time skip in almost every chapter, some are for a few days, some are for a few decades. Honestly, no disrepect to the author, but this isn't really a story, this a summary. Author puts time skip lines, MC has x and x new powers that she trained, time skip line, x and x powers and knowledge, time skip x and x new family members. I like the premises of the story and a few of the chapters but the time skips are too frequent and cover too dang much. I mean imagine an anime series that basically ever episode there's a time skip scene and then were shown the MC being stronger and more knowledgable two weeks, 3 months, 30 years(these are some of the time skip lines the author used) later. It would be so boring. Also the MC likes to say she is a "sneaky Snake" and that she relies on cunning and trap and long distance attacks, Yet in most fights or anything a lot of what I hear the Mc do is equivalent to "I hit them.....a lot, oh and then sealed or stole their powers".

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