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Neura_D
Neura_DLv104yr
2020-08-14 22:45

Meski penulisannya masih harus diperbaiki lagi, tapi secara keseluruhan penyampaian ceritanya masih enak untuk dibaca.. terus, mungkin karena ini berdasarkan kisah nyata ya, jadi plotnya bisa kerasa banget gt.. tinggal Authornya semangat update terus nihh [img=recommend]

Arman Sang Penakluk

Si_Koplak
4.9
402 Chs

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Si_Koplak
Si_KoplakAuthor

Makasih banyak atas saran dan masukannya kak, kedepannya akan diperbaiki lagi untuk penulisannya, karena masih belajar nulis juga,.. hehehehe Berharap ada masukan dan saran untuk kedepannya agar bisa lebih baik,...

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Ayu_yusti
Ayu_yustiLv3

Jadi penasaran dengan kelanjutan ceritanya. . . Semangat terus gan, semoga kisahnya berlanjut dan gak terpotong, semoga makin banyak juga yang baca, .

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warungmakan2204
warungmakan2204Lv3

Reveal spoiler

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Ikhwan27579
Ikhwan27579Lv3

Mantap, saya suka......apalagi ceritanya berasal dari tanah kelahiranku makassar, lanjutkan terus nah bro / sis, saya tunggu selalu chapter terbarunya, ewako

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Kira_Khasunny
Kira_KhasunnyLv2

Ada N.B di akhir sino**is tentang kepenulisan yang kurang bagus. Oke ... aku sudah memaklumi dari awal membaca chapter satu. Akan tetapi, bukankah lebih baik belajar pelan-pelan sambil tetap menulis novel? Jadi, suatu saat setelah novelmu tamat, kamu bisa revisi lagi. Perbaiki apa yang kurang seperti tanda baca dan PUEBI. Btw, aku suka nama setiap karakternya memakai nama lokal. Semangat berkarya! 😊 👍🏻

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Chila04
Chila04Lv2

wah keren!!!! aku suka, aku suka [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

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aty905
aty905Lv2

save dulu sepertinya seru!!!! semangat Thor dalam berkarya[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Nayya_Phrustazies
Nayya_PhrustaziesLv3

Ceritanya menarik... Cerita yang sederhana tapi bagus 😍🥰🥰😘😘😘😘😘❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌿🌿🌿🌿🌳☘️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

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Dwi_Setya23
Dwi_Setya23Lv4

Cerita nya menarik, tentang pembalasan dendam dari murid untuk guru nya. Lanjut terus thor, masih penasaran kelanjutan nya... Semangat!👍👍👍

4yr
Ayun_8947
Ayun_8947Lv10

Keren ka. Penulisan yang sederhana mengingatkanku dengan novel penghuni perpustakaan. Teratur dan sedap di baca. Rekomen buat teman teman. Ceritanya juga mengalir... Di tunggu next Kaka Keren sih ini harus masuk pustaka kalian

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