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2020-07-19 02:35

Hi~! You asked for your dii to leave a review so here it is~! Though I only read two chapters, but this is what I think so far. Your narration is nice, and I actually like how this story started. I could already see potential. :) I have a few tips, such as the redundant usage of the word “said”. You may use other words such as “remarked” , “commented” , “answered” , “retorted” etc. I will leave a link here: https://owlcation.com/humanities/400-Alternative-words-for-said And I know you’ve been updating frequently, as you always tell me that you are writing daily for your story~! Which is good! Even though I am 2 chapters in, I could see that your story is in an okay pace, not too rushed, not too fast. I have yet to read the story though, for more comments on the characters and the world background. I would go back and edit my review once I have read more~! But overall, your story is promising and I wish you luck, author~! Congrats for being contracted! 🥰

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Thank you so much dii. I love you🤗❤ and I will surely use the tip to make my novel better. 🥰🥰

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Thank you so much dii. I love you🤗❤ and I will surely use the tip to make my novel better. 🥰🥰

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