Yeet!!! I noticed some errors in grammars but nah!!! Even Grammarly and a little proofreading will remedy those!!! Story Development and pacing is just right, I think? The pacing got rushed after the 5th Chapter though. Fast-paced is different from rushed. Don't be excited to write your thoughts, that's where almost all writers rushes their works. My past work is just like that too😂😂😂. Just like what Webnovel says when you're about to write, Just keep calm and write. Don't be excited or too fired up. Character designs is good and explorative, also imaginative. I quiet envy your imagination, haha. All in all this has potential, keep up the good work!!!
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