Review Detail of mrmrcia in REALITY

You really have a wide spectrum of imagination. To make up different scenarios of differing settings is truly a creative feat. It is amusing that the POV is like the narration of the readers, letting us be more intimate with the story. As always, grammatical errors are something that we have to take into account when writing. They can be easily corrected and will able you to have a better progression in your passages. Each scenarios can be a story on their own, that is provided. However, I do feel, as opposed to the other review, that the pacing is quite hurried? I don't really know how to word it, but yes, it feels like that. Also, in between dialogues, please put in a little bit of transition, so it wouldn't be as lengthy as it is now. Let the information flow out through the whole chapter instead of clumping them in one paragraph. All in all, this is a great test for imaginative people. It is exciting to read different worlds in each chapter! You are a great writer, so please continue writing! I'm gonna be cheering you on!