Review Detail of elano77 in The Last Primal

Wow. The work is good. The pacing of the story is measured and stable and nothing has felt too forced so far. My main criticism is that the author is a bit inexperienced and this shows in his character design and use of suspense. Some of the characters are too one-dimensional and do things in an unrealistic way. Others are exaggeratedly childish in a way that is unbecoming. For the fight that just concluded, there was so much foreshadowing that the mystery was killed. Foreshadowing should be balanced because it is an object of confusion. It is designed to keep the audience guessing that something might happen. The author used it so much that I knew a difficult fight was coming about 4 chapters before the fight happened. That aside, the world-building of the story is gradual and well-rounded. The premise is an interesting one and the element of suspense surrounding the different activities keeps you interested. The writing quality is superb, no choppy paragraphs or wrong use of grammar and the inter-character interactions are interesting. Solid 4.8 for the story. I would encourage any with an appetite for fiction to read it.