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SorriaLv43yrSorria

Honestly, your history is good but you really don't know how to express feelings, the personality of the other characters is also... weird, witchers are a bunch of serious people and I believe you failed to show that. Your progression is not also good, believe me, I had problems with history progression too but you have to show, for example, how the people get close to the Mc and start to care for her.

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Vyr's journey through the multiverse

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yeah i'm new to writeing and i have problems when it comes to the progression. but i do have a reason the witchers a group of Very serious people attacted to Vyr easily. most witchers because of the witcher trial are more intuned with nature. Vyr is a Progenitor of all races, thus makeing the witchers very chill around her. i admit im bad at emotion but i also didnt want the story to progress that much in the witcher world yet. im glad you let me know the problem the story had and i will try and at least make them better from now on.