Review Detail of Evergreen_Autumn in Millennium Tension

The concept is interesting! As an English teacher, I have some advice if you don't mind me sharing though: I've noticed that you tend to switch back and forth between present-tense and past-tense often. This can be distracting when trying to immerse yourself, and it can interrupt the flow when you're trying to form a mental image of what's happening. Likewise, the vast majority of published novels are written entirely in past-tense, as past-tense words have stronger undertones in the reader's mind when forming mental images. (The only exception to this past-tense restriction is dialogue.) To take some examples from the first chapter: "...relationships can affect how severe" (present-tense) "But this case looks" (present-tense) "This situation confused Aizen" (past-tense) "...now he hasn't remarried" (present-tense) "hard work paid off" (past-tense) "Aizen succeeded in creating" (past-tense) There are also some other grammatical issues, but the writing quality in this novel is still better than 90% of the other novels on this site. The writing has a lot of potential, so I'm giving it a 5-star rating anyways.