Review Detail of Nathanielornsby in Life Travelling Through Fiction
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It was an amazing story and I was a loyal follower of the story but when you got to the Avatar bit it started going iffy at the ending you Completely lost me as a reader when you had the two girls follow the Mc but other than that it is a great story I would recommend it to anyone.
Life Travelling Through Fiction
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It is not that I don’t like it, it is just how confusing it got like the Mc was travaling with the Main gang and then suddenly decides to join Azura and stuff to help take down her father and help her get over her mental demons just because he felt sorry for her. That stuff just got to me because one the other worlds he went to he didn’t act like that at all It was just so uncharacteristic for him plus he At the end he brought them with them to mass effect with him. It should just be him in my opinion because as soon as you get other people involved it takes away all the fun
Quilidity:What about the Avatar arc did you not like?
That's fair. I think the change in character has more to with me fleshing him out a bit more compared to the early jumps. As for companions, I can see it both ways. You don't want too many people or a Harem, both of those ruins it for me. At the same time having no carryover gets a bit boring in my opinion.
Nathanielornsby:It is not that I don’t like it, it is just how confusing it got like the Mc was travaling with the Main gang and then suddenly decides to join Azura and stuff to help take down her father and help her get over her mental demons just because he felt sorry for her. That stuff just got to me because one the other worlds he went to he didn’t act like that at all It was just so uncharacteristic for him plus he At the end he brought them with them to mass effect with him. It should just be him in my opinion because as soon as you get other people involved it takes away all the fun
Fair enough, to be honest this is the second Jump-Chain story I have read that takes a person with them but the first one Ruined it for me when they brought someone with them and that guy suddenly becomes an Idiot and forgets everything if the person he brought tells him to, like he was trained by batman and had the Master Detective perk so you would think if he got a bad feeling the first thing he would do is go investigate on this feeling but nope because the person he brought along said forget it he was probably overreacting he did just that and it ruined the story.
Quilidity:That's fair. I think the change in character has more to with me fleshing him out a bit more compared to the early jumps. As for companions, I can see it both ways. You don't want too many people or a Harem, both of those ruins it for me. At the same time having no carryover gets a bit boring in my opinion.
Nathanielornsby:Fair enough, to be honest this is the second Jump-Chain story I have read that takes a person with them but the first one Ruined it for me when they brought someone with them and that guy suddenly becomes an Idiot and forgets everything if the person he brought tells him to, like he was trained by batman and had the Master Detective perk so you would think if he got a bad feeling the first thing he would do is go investigate on this feeling but nope because the person he brought along said forget it he was probably overreacting he did just that and it ruined the story.