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FrozenKing
FrozenKingLv103yrFrozenKing

I only got to chapter 6 and had to call it quits on the fact it's less of a story and more of a brief description of what's happening. The pokemon fights aren't even explained it's just 'the gym was focused on rock so with my plant and water it was an easy win' not going into detail to explain the fights. All in all it reads like I'm reading the MC's daily diary.

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Life Travelling Through Fiction

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Quilidity
QuilidityAuthorQuilidity

That's fair, I probably should have fleshed it out a bit more. I think I was rushing these opening chapters. Ideally I would go back and fix them up a bit, but I want to focus on moving forward, practicing, and seeing how I improve in future chapters. Thanks for the honest feedback.

PandaSempai
PandaSempaiLv3PandaSempai

Didn't expect to see you here! Hahaha

PandaSempai
PandaSempaiLv3PandaSempai

Yah, that was honestly the best thing that you should do since you are already quite far in the story. It would just disrupt your flow. I saw some authors who did that and they never came back to tell the tale (lol). P.S: Going into details raises your word count and such. If you try to write like how you did in the first batches, you will get a plot summary. It's honestly like a plot summary, you know?

Quilidity:That's fair, I probably should have fleshed it out a bit more. I think I was rushing these opening chapters. Ideally I would go back and fix them up a bit, but I want to focus on moving forward, practicing, and seeing how I improve in future chapters. Thanks for the honest feedback.
Quilidity
QuilidityAuthorQuilidity

Yea, sections so far have been 7, 10, 2, 20, and I think 30-40 chapters long. The 2 chapter section was a one-off thing and the section I'm working now will be at least 30. So generally speaking, they're getting longer, more detailed, and hopefully less summary/diary-like.

PandaSempai:Yah, that was honestly the best thing that you should do since you are already quite far in the story. It would just disrupt your flow. I saw some authors who did that and they never came back to tell the tale (lol). P.S: Going into details raises your word count and such. If you try to write like how you did in the first batches, you will get a plot summary. It's honestly like a plot summary, you know?
PandaSempai
PandaSempaiLv3PandaSempai

Everybody here loves long chapters. There's only a select few novels who got popular when their word count was so low. Take GhostZ or whatever his name is for example. His word count is always at a 500-1000 word count. It's popular since a lot of the readers just over hypes the situation but it's not really 'that' great. There's also that other pokemon FF where his starter is an altered Lugia. His writing style was similar to yours. Little to no dialogues and more like a plot summary.

Quilidity:Yea, sections so far have been 7, 10, 2, 20, and I think 30-40 chapters long. The 2 chapter section was a one-off thing and the section I'm working now will be at least 30. So generally speaking, they're getting longer, more detailed, and hopefully less summary/diary-like.
Infamous_Fitz
Infamous_FitzLv2Infamous_Fitz

It's the same reason a,why i don't like multi verse novels cause once you start liking the flow of the story the author changes world's like every 5-10 chapters