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2020-06-03 14:30

Writing Quality: Pretty fluid writing with a strong emphasis on emotion and responses, which I find to be extremely fitting for a romance story 5/5 Stability of Updates: Just going to assume ahahha ^-^ 5/5 Story Development: This was the only category I gave a 4 for, and my reasoning was for the jumps between time. Specifying with then and now and their ages was helpful for me to remind me whether it was in the present or past, but personally, it made it more difficult to immerse in their present day relationship. For me, if you instead presented it directly as a flashback in which Alana was like back when.... then I think it would have flowed a bit better (but take what I said with a grain of salt ^-^) 4/5 Character Design: I appreciate how you added fear and uncertainty so that the story was more realistic 5/5 World Background: Pretty standard for a CEO romance 5/5

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Thank you!! Yes, it won't keep going back and forth between the past and present, don't worry :)

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