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Jentegamer74
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This is sort of early for a review but here I go. Heres some stuff you could improve with the story^^ 1-Write more details about what the enviroment, what weather it is and maybe some facts about the town? Like does a lot of people live there? Are the humans slaves and the vampires and all of those "rich"? 2- You can write some more info about the characters overall, like maybe how some of them look or what they are thinking and act like. 3- The story progresses very quickly, suddenly we are hopping 16 years into the future? It seems all too sudden after have read just a few chapters at most. Conclusion- This book has a really good story overall, and has a lot of room for improvement, keep on going!

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Thank you! I will keep this in mind.