Overall, I would say this story is a strong success! My one recommendation would be to try and reread your work before publishing to avoid overuse of some words/phrases. For example, using the term 'snow-white' twice in the same paragraph seems a tad excessive. Consider swapping one to 'glistening white' or something similar. Other than that, a very wonderful piece, Author!
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