Everything is great so far The chapter rates good The character design is good I've gotten attached to Eri-chan I'm not only that but I want more, the only thing that I say to improve is more conversation between characters as well there are plenty of them there's a lack of it between Eri and the MC as well as the mother and the MC The father as well so while I've gotten attached to them they'll act enough dialogue to truly attach my heart to them enough to root for them the whole time. So author great job so far just improve the dialogue a bit add a little bit more and a few more intimate moments and try not to skip early on as since you've made him a child and have allowed us to witness this point in his life you should try to expand upon it a little bit more obviously since you're sending them to do that program you should try to find a way to incorporate intimate moments there try not to skip it as much Skip the training but try to have a chapter to dedicated towards intimate moments.
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