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Pursuit of Love: Adorable Husband and Precious Wife, is a work of romance by KCChary. It was a pleasure to read the novel. The title itself evokes a sense of relationship. The book revolves around the life a woman named Violette. After a final wish from Charlie, an old man who is treated as family for the two parties, Violette was persuaded to marry a man whom she is bitter to. The man goes by the name, Lucian. Personally, what I love about the book is the contrast between the two. One is prideful and a bit bitter to her husband, the other is caring, patient, and sweet. I've read novels similar to this, and so far, it's a great read. The book itself contains all the elements of a good romance novel, but it follows a common trope. Just by the synopsis, one could easily predict what will happen next. When writing a synopsis, your aim is to gather the attention of readers, not describe and predict what will happen or what the characteristics of the characters are. If one would read the synopsis, they would automatically figure out that in the end, they get together even if they were once far apart. As much as possible, characters should be hidden, plot shouldn't be spoiled, characteristics shouldn't be shown. I will give an example of what a synopsis should be like: "The romance of the desert has the power to seduce. I ask you, have you ever loved so much? Been so possessed by jealousy, that you might kill?" -Death on the Nile by Agatha Christie, movie adaptation. Another way to make a great synopsis is through figurative language. I will give an example: "The people applauded as their hearts raced to see who would triumph over the final flames. Then came the men who couldn’t live by their mistakes and there, the truth was revealed; she couldn’t accept it. Time fell under these men as they aimed to repeat what was forgotten." -Time and Order by NK_Cruz The synopsis above can grab the attention of many. One would ask: What was forgotten? Who were these men? What did the author mean by the final flames? What mistakes did these so-called men do? Who is this "she"? This is only a suggestion that I would like to say. You can still keep it if you want, or you could change things up a bit. The important thing when making a synopsis is that it makes the readers wonder or question themselves. It motivates them to read. When it comes to grammar, I couldn't find any flaw. Most are correct, some are technically correct. Punctuation marks were used properly except for the "over-dosage" of ellipses in the first chapter. The descriptions are vivid; this includes character design and world building. Overall, the plot is good, though it follows a common trope. Nothing wrong with that; I can see the author has written some twists of her own. As for the stability of updates, I'm uncertain of whatever that means since I'm new here. I'll just rate it five. To close my criticism, I would like to compliment the author for his or her novel. Word choice is absolutely brilliant. -Dann Giovanni.

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Pursuit of Love : Adorable Husband and Precious Wife

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Thank you for your honest review. And about the synopsis, thank you for pointing out the issues. I never thought that way but I realize it now. Actually, although the premise of the novel follows a general trope, the main plot is different from the others if I say so myself. But since the story hasn't progressed so far, your opinion is valid. And with the way the synopsis is written, it is understandable. So I will keep your suggestions in mind and make a better synopsis which could hopefully evoke curiosity and interest without outright laying out everything about the plot and characters. Once again, thank you for your time and honest feedback. Much appreciated.