Review Detail of Slesk in Harry Potter's Natural Villain-DROPPED!

I tried for a bit, I truly did. But the translation to English seems to be so-so and I just can't get into it despite really wanting to like it. I wish someone would edit and clean up the fic so that I didn't have to read stuff like: "The bad is not broken enough. The net price reduction is against Harry Potter. Father is also a good looking wall." What even is this? What does it mean? Just reading the first chapter left me with a bitter taste from such nonsensical sentences. Anyways either fix up the confusing sentences or get an editor to do it for you.