Review Detail of shadowdrake27 in CEO In A Another World

I like to breakdown each category and why I rated each as I did. Most of the issues were with readability. Don’t get discouraged, keep writing! Your idea is solid, but this isn’t my type of story to begin with. Writing Quality Let me know if you want more help with grammar... I can’t proofread the entire thing but I can finish the chapter I was working on. Basically, it was hard to read. I didn’t understand some parts. Long run on sentences made everything not flow well. Some verb tense issues made it choppy as well. 1/5. Stability of Updating You seem to write often, keep it up! 5/5. Story Development This was a big hard to score since it is so early in the novel. The concept is good and it gets to some action (this isn’t a fighting book so the “action” is entertainment and such) relatively quickly. My issues were that the story into jumped around a lot. Past, present, past, present, main story. Also, the story pacing seemed to move too fast at times. I said 3/5. Character Design The author clearly knows his MC well. Thought was put into the character. Other characters are not as well designed, but it is so early in the story that it isn’t fair to expect the author to have more than one or two well fleshed out characters. I got what the character was supposed to be and he was consistent. I wish more time was spent on his previous life and that the author slowed down a bit to introduce him to us, but that is a minor issue I suppose. My other issues were mostly caused by the writing quality section. 3/5. World Background I’m glad that the author didn’t try to explain the world in such great detail that it got boring. Necessary details were all there. It is still early in the story, but I think the world is unfolding nicely. I would just advise the author to keep revealing bits and pieces about the world as events happen. So far, that is how they are handing it. 4/5.