Review Detail of BaeVida in Return of the last survivor

Alryt, nice story I must say. Your writing quality is great. You got a nice flow I give u that. But you might want to cut down your paragraphs in your second and third chapter. Cos in those chapters, you have lots of important info... So making it long, made my head ache some more with my headache. I had to focus so much or I wud av lost what the paragraph was saying. Normally a paragraph shud b btw 3-5 if I am not mistaken. Little or no typos, great book n plotline author. It shows author knows what he is doing. Added to my library, would love to see where this is going. Nice work, keep it up.