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Zelkolak
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2020-05-16 15:58

The author here. I know it's shameless to do this, but here we go. This story is a work in progress, which means i only have a flicker of the idea where this story is going through. Momentarily i'm trying to figure out what the driving plot will be and what will be the mc's turning point which will make him do whatever he's going to do. The only thing i'm certain about is mc's character, which is he doesn't give a **** about what the world thinks the right thing to do is. He's vengeful, bitter and, if someone tries to step over his boundaries, he'll make sure the price to be paid is unheard of in its brutality.

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whoknowwhat
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that is the most selfless author I have seen. Keep up the good work. I like the story.

Zelkolak
ZelkolakAuthor

Thanks. There's room for improvement. It only has a chapter so far that can be read. There are mistakes that i saw after publishing it, so i have to assume my mistakes

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LordValmar
LordValmarLv4

I'm not good at writing reviews but I'll give it my best shot. I've read 28 chapters of this story before deciding to drop it. The main character behaves like a child throwing temper tantrums half the time. Granted he is in the body of a 10 year old or whatever, but that just makes it worse. I can appreciate a brutal and cold MC as much as the next guy but half the time he just felt like an edgelord prepubescent brat to me and was rather cringe-worthy. The story also, at least in the beginning, has several back-and-forth chapters that jump from future/past to current. Some may not mind this as it provides a little backstory on the MC but I personally found the repeated flashback chapters to be more annoying then anything else. I felt myself wanting to hurry ahead to get back to the "real" story happening in the current MC. The MC is... okay, yes he is psychotic, the description makes that clear enough, but it feels like the world doesn't really react to that as much as it should. Like he, as a kid in modern time, somehow beatup what I assume to be a vampire that just got done gorging his father to bits. Then he keeps him held hostage in the tool shed or something to keep torturing him. I guess the police grossly glossed over this crimescene and no one noticed, not even the mother. Its all pretty confusing really. Thats another thing. The superpowers. Now, I went into this story already expecting there to be some supernatural stuff going on. Afterall, its Vlad the Impaler. Who sees that and doesn't instantly think of some vampires? So I went in expecting something. However a little explanation would had been appreciated. There appears to be superpowers in the world. And the MC has one. But, unless I completely missed it, these were never really explained and are just there. As if its the most normal thing. At first I thought it was something special about the magical knife the MC gets at the start but I'm later lead to believe its him (or a combination of both). Flashforward a few chapters and now suddenly the MC can grow scales, fly around, summon red mist and move so fast its teleportation. At this point I'm left all the more confused because I have no idea where these supernatural abilities come from since the story never really touched on it. We even get a girl telling him off for "wasting his bloodline" when he overexerts his power. The powers and how they function in the world is never really introduced to us, they're just there as if we're expected to already understand the basics. Maybe this story is based off something I'm not aware of. I assumed it was a original story. We also don't get much insight on the MC's thoughts and reasons which makes it hard to really sympathize or relate with the character at all, regardless of what kind of edgey backstory he has. For example after being a drama queen at home he just packs up his bags and with a few followers he leaves his household to spend months traveling around. Thing is though, I have absolutely no idea why he did that. The story doesn't really give us an explanation for his motives or goals. He just ups and seemingly does nothing important for a few months other than traveling aimlessly and killing bandits and such. It'd be nice to have at least some insight on what exactly his goal there was or why he does what he does. I dropped the story after it introduced some "Towers" organizations and superpower/supernatural ancient powerful beings that are apparently hunting the MC because I guess prophecy or something. I don't know. Maybe there's some cool things going on here that others would appreciate but for me it was just annoying to constantly have this kind of stuff thrown in suddenly. I went into this story looking forward to seeing what a Vlad the Impaler SI could be like, since its a unique take on SI stories, imo. Since its dealing with a figure with a lot of mythos around his name I expected vampires or witchcratch and covens, if it was going to have supernatural elements. Even without superpowers or magic I felt this could still be an interesting subject. Maybe something like Game of Thrones (minus magic) with politics and world building with more mundane warfare. A kingdom building story perhaps since he is a person from modern times placed in the past in a situation that would give him the kind of political and social power to really change things up. It didn't turn out anything like what I was expecting. Honestly I can even easily forget that the MC is supposed to be Vlad. Now a lot of this might be more my own fault for going into it with certain expectations. It was still disappointing regardless. Some might enjoy this story. It wasn't what I was looking for, though, sadly.

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