Review Detail of shadowdrake27 in xxxxxxx

I should state that I found this story interesting. I am going to break down each category in a second, but the idea of MMORPG style dungeons, level systems, and magic in the real world was intriguing. I was more interested in the real world elements that made the story relatable. Also, I didn’t not read everything available just the first 7 or so chapters to get a good feel for things. Writing Quality The author fixed a lot of tense issues, which I respect. They are easy to miss. There were some mistakes, but I never had trouble understanding what was trying to be said. I bounced between a 3 and a 4 here, but landed on 4 because of the corrections and readability of mistakes. There were some parts that repetition made the story a bit less engaging though. 4/5 Stability of Updating: Not sure how to rate this, but the author writes faster than I can read their work. 5/5 Story Development: I had some issues here with a lot of focus on details that didn’t add to the story. Slow paced is fine, but if a high percentage of what the reader is getting is unimportant to the plot or characters identity, then skimming is inevitable. This was a bigger deal earlier on in the story when I wasn’t already invested. Pacing was strange in general at times, but the author did do a job over all. 4/5. Character Design: A lot of common mistakes were made here in my opinion. If one area needed to be focused on and improved I think this would be the category. The MC was generally okay. I cared about him enough and knew quite a bit about him. My issue with the MC is I felt like I knew a lot of things that didn’t matter, but I was clueless about important things. Questions like “does he like coffee?” Were answered without a doubt. Questions like “does he want to be a delver?” Or “what drives him?” Were either confusing or left out in my opinion. I thought he talked about not wanting to risk his life as a delver in the beginning, but later in the story he was like “this is what I have always dreamed of doing!” So yeah. Other characters were all introduced at once so fast that I could hardly remember who they were. None of them stood out except one, Bea. Even then, I didn’t care about her until after the big fight scene when she almost died. I liked the part where we got to see more personality of hers. However, she didn’t seem that consistent with the first time we met her and it wasn’t much. The cat in the banana hat (after which the story is named) seemed like they didn’t have much to their personality. They are a cat, and the behavior is very cat-like, but they didn’t even seem to be a major character to me. There wasn’t much between the MC and the magic cat other than cuddling like I might do with my cats. They mostly talked about drinking coffee or wanting to drink coffee. I don’t know, I expected more from this character personally. All other characters were (so far) plot devices that just advanced things. This could change dramatically as each character gets more time. 2/5. World Background: I loved the concept here. You could say this was my favorite part of the story. Bringing magic and dungeons to the real world. The author obvious put a lot of thought into things like how leveling works and what the rules are for this new world. There was a government agency that over saw it, new laws/ restrictions, etc. It was a pretty compelling concept for what might happen i the real world if this type of stuff was discovered. There is even the mystery of unknown elements because everything is still new. This was well done. I gave it a 4, rather than a five, because a lot of little things that I think could be improved or explained better. 4/5. Sorry if this was vague or confusing. I wrote it while tired. This is a solid start. You also write a lot. The chapters are very long, which is a good thing. Keep up the work and you will have a wonderful story by the time this is done.