Review Detail of Splashy101 in The Gene Gamer

The first 5 chapters is a huge info dump, but none of it is info you need nor wanted. On the parts where you need info there is not any. I recommend reading over what you wrote becuase there are a lot grammer and spelling mistakes. You should also consider writing from a point of view that it is happening to you Instead of saying then Whoever told us this. Use more quotes instead of saying someone said do this. There are many plot holes as well so consider filling those in. There are so many things wrong with the quality of writing that I assume you know of. The power system is not very good either. The story itself and the idea behind It is good, but the story is very poorly written. I do not know the update schedule so i just put four for it. The quality of the book drops immensely the more I read. If you can rewrite the Chapters and improve your grammer I believe this could be a great book, but it is not for now.